Fugitive Fragments

by Mike McGuire

Needlegate

camel

 

 

 

 

 

 

Psalms in prayer from a parish in Prague
Muezzins mustering from mosques in Mashhad
Incantations in India, Dinka drums deafening
Baha’i and Buddhist brainstorming beliefs
Holy Hebrew homily hailing Hanukkah
Small Shinto shrines soliciting sprites

Discordant words beg all souls to be peaceful
Riding their camels through eyes of their needle

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39 thoughts on “Needlegate

  1. Beautifully structured, a well thought out message and a superb ending. Wow image! Loved it all.

  2. Prayers ascending to heaven that allow a camel to pass through the eye of a needle at last.

  3. Very beautiful journey through faith, liked it very much.

  4. I LOVED the alliterative allegory, I was fascinated with the form and function which found its mark; … I BELIEVE that all of our religious realms are merely gathering points along our trajectory to the TRUTH…the basic tenants of each group are the same…and have provided the foundations for civility …. But if we pass through these “gates” on our way to the light and truth…. Do we not get further from our religions and closer to each other?

  5. All the words just rhythm so beautifully… Like it…

  6. very, very good!! We should keep this in mind each and every day!!

  7. Love this poem, Mike, especially the word plays.

  8. The less we burden ourselves with, the easier it is to slip through the eye of the needle.

    You’ve presented a vast landscape in a few lines.

    Peace,
    Eric

  9. I’ve always liked that little throwaway line of JC’s about the rich man and the camel and whatnot. Nice to see you using it here. Hope the righteous and rich caravan gets stuck in it though.

  10. pi314chron on said:

    You’ve shown Swinburne to be a pitiful poetaster when it comes to the powerful potential of alliteration. Excellent work, Mike. — Ron –

    • Just a device here to contrast harmony and dissonance Ron but I’ll gladly file your great compliment away for my next bout with writer’s drought. Many thanks.

  11. penetrating memories, intrigue dark beauty into holy solitude …when I can read between the lines and seize the structure of your play – peaceful and beautiful Mike

  12. Needle gate…ha, clever! Made me smile. What inspires you, I’m curious..?

    • Thanks Jackie. This is my 4th edit of an answer to your question: I don’t know. Sorry – but you’ve certainly set me thinking…

      • That’s a big question. Maybe I should rephrase. Let’s try this: Maybe you get inspired by daily sights and sounds, or something on the news or in the paper or in a novel that you think would be great reinterpreted as a poem. Does it inspire you the thrill of boiling long narratives down to the most concise eloquent essence? Getting to the root of it in rhyme? And then again, maybe there is no answer… Although now you’ve set me to thinking…what’s it like to be a poet in today’s world? Hmmm…

  13. Alive and alert with alliteration, I’m left whirling like a Dervish!

  14. Tayyeba on said:

    Powerful! :o

  15. Love the image too! Perfect complement for your powerful prose.

  16. I love that last line. Very powerful.

  17. Love the image – and the effective use you make of alliteration and assonance. You’ve kept it short – and it suits the topic. Lots to recommend this one, Mike :)

  18. Absolutely am astounded… awesomely amazing alliteration…

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