Fugitive Fragments

by Mike McGuire

Rhapsody in Blue Ink

By Pablo Perez [CC-BY-SA-3] via Wikimedia Commons5

 

 

 

 

 

 

To pour a poem onto page
select a well of ink
try one with mood
or brooding shrewd
perhaps a wistful ilk

Some brands can have a tad of fear
or fourteen heartbeats loud
to use it in
a pulse of sin
and flash from thundercloud

Some others mix in seasonings
and oil to give it pace
or hints of blood
in dirty mud
with perspiration paste

My ink is just a quiet thing
I buy it off the shelf
unaltered, bland
and nothing grand
a simple liquid self

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57 thoughts on “Rhapsody in Blue Ink

  1. Reposted on my blog, then I went reading the comments. One of them spoke to your use of rhyme in an un-silly way. I re-read it, and think I see some of Kipling’s influence.

    • Gosh! Your interpretation is propitious and very generous. I thank you sincerely for reading and returning such positive feedback.

      • Beware of bloggers bearing platitudes 😮. Your prose was an entity unto itself. Beginning, middle, and definitive end. With stanzas 1&4; or 2&3 , you could have stopped there. My Kipling reference was to try an instigate further ‘uplifting’ goal. Ol’ Kip would explain the harsh reality, but usually left you on the upswing – something to strive for.

  2. Reblogged this on Rants Unto the Ether and commented:
    Not much on writing prose myself (a character flaw, assuredly), but this one’s pretty good. My only critique is that it should have ended with a more uplifting, forward-looking stanza.

  3. Made of things that I understand. Like music that comes together and sits well. By far my favourite that you have written. :)

  4. Deft, beautiful work. Love this! And thank you so much for visiting my humble abode….I truly appreciate it.

  5. therunawaywords on said:

    I love this!

  6. I agree with all the comments
    and I like it ! your words make me smile…
    I like that you buy off the shelf…simple is best…
    Take care…You Matter…
    )0(
    maryrose

  7. Penned in purposeful combination power can vibrate off the written page. Even more amazing is how our emotive state permeates the inks core. You’ve captured this.

  8. I love it. Thank you so much for writing this

  9. Absolutely terrific!

  10. Well done, Mike. It’s difficult to use rhyme and not sound silly. You have managed to find the appropriate words that not only keep the rhyme but the rhythm too.

  11. I tried to find one or two lines I loved more so than the others…but they all fit so perfectly…I could not. I shall simply say….this is masterfully done…sublimely expressed… I stand in admiration of your talent my good sir…

  12. This is marvelous — all the more for the unassuming ending.

  13. I do love the idea of wistful ink… This poem makes me want to improve my handwriting… ;)

    • Ha! If only wistful was that easy hollyanne (:
      I wonder how long it will take handwriting to die out entirely People such as you or I might become sought-after translators of ancient texts circa 1960.

  14. You may try something wistful and soft with a quiet ink..something original

    • Goodness! A commission to write a poem! First ever! No promises but as soon as I scrub all the ink off my fingers from this last effort I’ll put some thought into it. A lovely compliment n-l and I acknowledge it and thank you.

  15. wonderful and very creative. lovely choice of topic and appreciate the photo chosen too

  16. Thanks for not being afraid of rhyme.

    • That’s me, Mike The Fearless Poet! Well, maybe not but versatility (yes, intended) is a good quality to keep ones readers from becoming bored. I am glad that you approve and thank you for stopping by.

  17. Reblogged this on Drops of Ink and commented:
    Absolutely gorgeous! Mike is a truly fantastic poet. Not to be missed.

  18. I just want to sink into your way with words and never resurface. Beautifully done.

  19. Whimsical and brooding, the best of both worlds. And again, with a stupendous final line!

  20. Nice lightness of tone here Mike, and a playful dynamic which is well supported by your rhyming scheme.

  21. A wonderfully delightful read. :)

  22. There is definitely nothing bland about your ink, Mike. Nor simple. This is a gorgeous poem.

  23. Everyone has their “thing”and to put in poetry is very creative and wonderfully done.

  24. Always worth waiting for Mike.

    Chris.

  25. This reads out loud so well, and simplicity in my experience tends to accompany authenticity.

    I also keep it simple, but I have to admit a fetish for the smell of Sumi ink and even have some incense made with it, but when it comes to writing, I’ll make my mark with anything that comes to hand. 😊

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